Assignment #5: First Draft

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    • #26701
      Christy Tucker

      Post the first draft of your scenario.

      If you’re breaking up the content over two weeks, you can post your draft of the ideal path first, and then write the rest in week 6.

    • #26751
      Sharmila Adhya

      This is the make-up file after Week 6 on Assignment 4 and 5. Please share your reviews and feedback

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    • #26760
      Christy Tucker

      Your scenario has gotten so long! You really have a ton of content here, so I know this is a lot of effort. I am getting to the point where it’s tricky to follow in the poof PDF, so I’m looking forward to seeing it in an actual published version next week so I can click through the choices and follow the story more easily.

      Since 3 of the subordinates have both first and last names, it might be helpful to give Mitchell a last name too for consistency. Also, Mitchell is typically a male name, so I was surprised to see that this character is female in her complaint against Dean. Maybe you could make Mitchell her last name, and give her a more obviously female name since it seems relevant to the complaint.

      Also, I didn’t catch it in your earlier draft, but usually Korean first names have two parts. His first name would probably be Seo Jung, with the last name Woong. The South Koreans I have known have always used both parts of their first names unless we were familiar enough to use a nickname.

      If you want to check that the learners have visited all 4 character intros before continuing, you can add multiple conditions to the if: macro. Right now, they really only need to view one intro.

      (if: (visited:”Dean Hadebe”) and (visited:”Sabarina Ali”) and (visited: “Mitchell”) and (visited:”Seo Jungwoong”))[[[Continue->Abdul’s challenge]] ]

      When you use HTML code in Harlowe, you just need the individual element that you’re including (e.g., everything inside img src=… Take out the DOCTYPE, head, and body tags. (Edit: I had to remove the < brackets around the image tag because the forum wants to treat it as actual HTML. You'll need them here and in the other image below.) For your actual image, you can use a relative path instead of C:\. That way, when you publish it, you'll publish the whole folder with the story and images together. That means it will look like this: img src="/images/Abdul Introduction.png" align="extreme left" alt="An introductory photo of Abdul Mohammed with a smile on his face" style=margin-right:100px;margin-left: 40px;margin-top: 20 px; I have some examples with images here so you can see how to do it without all the extra HTML code.

      If you want to add some CSS styles (rather than enchant macros), you can do that in the Stylesheet for your story, rather than in the individual passages. In the menu, click Story, then Stylesheet. Enter your CSS there (just the style definitions, not any other headers labeling it as a style since that's already part of Twine).

      When you give learners the opportunity to return back, consider changing the phrasing. "Return to select the right option" is OK, but maybe "Return to select a different option" might be received a little differently. It doesn't feel as much like incorrect feedback (and your consequences already make it clear that this was a bad choice).

      Your scenario is definitely coming together! You've made a lot of progress so far.

    • #26763
      Sharmila Adhya

      Dear Christy, First of all thank you so much for giving an invaluable detailed comment on my project. The published version of the project is in your google drive. You can download it to browse through Scenario 1. I am sharing the link here again: (Please note that this link is provided in my last comment too)

      Here are some of my thoughts regards the points that has been discussed:

      a. While I totally agree with you that it’s a lot of less work, to do the styling in the style sheet rather than in the individual passages, I am a bit confused on the following aspects:

      -Will the styling codes give the same output if the image dimensions are different along with the length of the passages? My initial thought is it won’t work. Let me know your views regards this?

      b. I am not sure whether I will be using Harlowe till the end. As I am reading that Harlowe gives limited styling options. I will be using Sugar Cube instead, as I also want to incorporate some gaming elements in this course. I wanted to include a timer, whenever the participants are coming to the question page. Do you have any suggestions, as to what time limit, we should give the learner for the options, in order to give them a good experience? Also, do you have any idea, whether I can include xapi with Sugarcube or not?

      I will include the name for the South Korean personality (Seo Jung instead of just Seo)
      I will be also changing the option to “Return to select a different option” instead of “Return to select the right option”

      I will be looking forward to your suggestions. Thanks again for taking the time to review

      • #26765
        Christy Tucker

        Sorry, Sharmila, your reply got marked as spam for some reason and was hidden. It’s visible now.

        The individual dimensions of images will have to be set in each image. You can use style= within the img tag to add style, or width and height properties. But those are enclosed in the img tag, not in a style sheet. See the examples from W3C Schools on the image tag for examples.

        You jumped ahead a bit in the course; I explained how to add images in the week 7 live session. Maybe it will make more sense after you watch that.

        Sugarcube does have more options for programming than Harlowe, partly because it’s designed to work more efficiently with Javascript. You are welcome to switch your story style to Sugarcube, but understand that I won’t be able to support you anymore. You’ll be on your own to find the resources online or to use the Twine Discord community for help.

        Sugarcube is designed for people who already know web programming, CSS, and Javascript, so many game designers prefer it because they have those existing skills. Harlowe is designed for people who don’t already have those programming skills, which is why that’s what I use and what I teach in this course. If you feel like your existing CSS and Javascript skills are up to it, you absolutely can do more complex development beyond the scope of this course.

        I don’t recommend using a timer as a feedback. I explain why in this blog post. (There are times when I think it’s helpful, but this isn’t one of them.)

        If you want to add one anyway, there’s a suggestion here that you can try.

        Don’t forget to change the image paths for your images to relative images and to keep everything in a folder together. I do see the html file, but of course I only see the alt text for the images currently since the links are all broken and I don’t have the image files. That’s fine for this review, but for the week 7 assignment you’ll need it all together.

    • #26878
      Ronald Genech

      Here is my story , so far.
      I have uploaded an earlier version of this pdf to the week 3 assignment, and this is this week’s assignment, week 5 .
      I also shared an file in a previous week.
      Please let me know if you have any problems accessing my story, via, or these poof pdfs.
      I am new to both and poof, so I think I am doing this correctly.
      The good news is I am finally getting the hang of Twine(Basics ,only ,so far )
      It has been a lot of fun.
      I am the type that does not like to have ” just text ” on each slide, so each Twine slide has an image, as well as words.
      ( that is the teacher in me. I always tell my students to have at least 1 image per slide, when presenting. )
      Anyways, I hope you like my story.
      Thanks for your patience and guidance.
      Ron Genech

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      • #26895
        Christy Tucker

        Yes, your PDF attachment worked perfectly! One small note about Twine that I can see here in this PDF (but couldn’t see in your week 8 version) is the tags. Overall, the tags on the passages are really for you, so you should do what works for you. However, for future projects, you might find it more useful to just use tags like “good” “bad” “info” that you can reuse for multiple passages. The tags are more like categories that contain multiple passages. By using a different tag for each passage, you are limiting some of the potential features like filtering for all passages with a particular tag.

        That’s a minor quibble though–I think the scenario overall has a lot of great information in it, as I noted on your week 8 assignment!

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