Assignment #9: Final Scenario

[Christy Tucker]

Post a link to your final scenario here. Please review other scenarios and provide feedback on what worked well and what could be improved.

[Helen Teague]

Hi Everyone!
It has been wonderful to learn with you in my second time in this course!

Christy! Yay! I was able to access the link using a different browser!! I’m in!

Here is the latest link to my branching scenario on APA Style and Formatting. A pdf proof script is attached. Although it is labeled as “Week 8,” it was created last night.
The scenario is written for graduate students, most in the age range of 28-43 in research, philosophy, and final Capstone courses. I hope to beta test it with my current group of grad students… after reading your ideas!

https://10replearning.neocities.org/APAScenario/APA_TeagueWk8.html

🙂
Helen Teague

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[Christy Tucker]

I know I’m the only one who saw the earlier versions of this with the previous intro, but I like this version of it. Instead of the description, now the exposition is in the conversation between Khalil and Jazzi. It all feels more conversational. Giving Khalil someone to talk to, rather than just seeing his inner monologue, feels much livelier to me. This was a great shift in the tone to share all the same info and plot as before, but in a more conversational way.

You could perhaps do one more pass through the dialogue to add some more contractions. If you read the dialogue aloud, you’ll hear some places that sound a little more stiff and formal. It’s hard when you’re used to academic writing, I know, and you do have a fair number of contractions.

For example, what sounds more natural? “I did not plagiarize at all!” or “I didn’t plagiarize at all!”

A couple of style notes:

* I added a comment in my PDF notes about the style passage. If you just want a white background with black text, you can do that–I put the macro and directions in the PDF. That will apply to the whole story rather than needing to add the enchant macro to each individual passage.
* Some of the passages near the end have all italicized text. Is there a specific reason you switched to more italics?

I added a few proofreading notes too–just some nitpicky things. Here are my comments in the PDF.

Great work! I think this will be a fun way to encourage your students to check the TurnItIn report and to help them understand the importance of paraphrasing rather than using large quotes in their writing.

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[Ronald Genech]

Are they in a car ?? If so, I would change the pic.. I wrote some red marks on scene 1.. I would shorten that awkward part to : ” Yep ! , I’ve read the profs comments and he thinks I was cheating. I’ve never gotten scores this low and IF I don’t get my grades up .. ” ( drop the ” Well, Jazzi ” part , in the beginning.

Also, good topic. My school recently started Turnitin.com Cheating is RAMPANT at my school, either on purpose, or inadvertently … i am guessing the FORMER.

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[Ronald Genech]

For this next scene.. i feel like there is a word missing at the end … ” credit union …… what ? credit union job ?? credit union scholarship ??

Also, nice nod to ” Professor Tucker ” 🙂

I will check the rest of the branching when I get more time. I need to work on MY project, now.
I am sorry , Christy ( Professor Tucker ) , I need a few more days to finish mine.
Thanks for your patience.
Ron Genech

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[Helen Teague]

Thank you, Ron for taking time to offer some feedback! Good catches that will be remedied. Funny you would mention your university’s experience and that cheating is rampant. Us too, but at the university where I work, the word “misalignment” and/or “not in alignment with APA” has replaced “cheating.” 😀

~Helen

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